Part 5: How to Write a Year 6 Extended Response in 6 Steps

Are you anxious that your writing won’t be up to scratch for High School? To help you with your transition from Year 6 to Year 7 English, we’ve developed this post to help you write the perfect extended response in only 6 steps.

Do any of these sound like you:

1. I’m unsure how to write an extended response?
2. I don’t know what makes a strong extended response?
3. How am I going to how to tackle writing extended responses when I’m in High School in a few months?

Did you nod your head as you read these questions?

We know the struggle. We get it.

To help you out, we are giving you our 6 step plan on how to write an extended response.

In this post we will go through:

• An overview of how to write an extended response
• Common struggles
• Writing an extended response: In-depth

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How to write an extended response: Overview

The key to writing a 20/20 extended response lies in mastering how to write PEEL paragraphs and practising this skill.

Let’s have a quick overview of what junior students are taught at Matrix (Don’t worry, we’ll go into it deeper further down this post):

1. Read the question and understand what it is asking
2. Brainstorm ideas which you could incorporate into your answer
3. Plan your response
   1. What type of piece are you writing?
   2. Write a list of keywords you can use in your response
   3. Plan a structure
4. Write your first draft using the PEEL paragraph structure
   1. Write a topic sentence
   2. Introduce and present your example
   3. Explain your example
   4. Link your paragraph
   5. Put it all together
5. Get feedback
6. Re-draft!

Why do Year 6 students struggle with extended responses?

They make some common blunders: 

1. They are unsure about how to structure a response.
2. They do not know what makes an extended response strong.
3. They present an abundance of information. But can’t effectively put it in one response concisely.
4. They do not realise what the shortcomings in their extended response are.
5. They do not completely understand how to write succinctly.

Do you see yourself in these 5 common struggles?

That’s okay. These struggles can be removed and writing can become easy and enjoyable. Let’s see how our 6 step guide will help you write the perfect extended response.

How to write a Year 6 extended response in 6 steps: In-depth

Now, let’s look at how to write that outstanding extended response in depth. To help you understand the process we’ll put the steps into perspective by going an example from the novel ‘Holes,’ by Louis Sachar.

Step 1: Unpacking the question

As tempting as it may be to dive in and start writing straight away-DON’T!

The first step to write an extended response is unpacking the question. As you move from Year 6 to Year 7, the questions increase in difficulty.

It is really important you understand the question and what it is asking, so you can write succinctly and get the best possible mark!

How?

Step 1A: Read the question twice.

The question we are going to look at is:

How does Sachar convey the power of individual choices through his novel ‘Holes’?

Read this question twice and think about what the question is asking of you.

Step 1B: Highlight keywords in the question.

Get out a trusty highlighter and highlight the keywords in the questions.

The keywords are those words which you need to tackle in your extended response.

Your ideas will arise from the keywords in the question.

Highlight the verb and the key ideas the question wants you to tackle.

If we look at the question in our example, the keywords we will highlight are:

How, power, individual choices

Step 1C: Write a simple sentence answering the question.

Doing this will allow you to narrow down your ideas and think about what you understand from the question.

If we think back to our example, a sentence we could write is:

Sachar uses emotive language and the relationship between Stanley and Zero to highlight that the choices we make have a powerful impact on both our present and future.

Step 2: Brainstorm

You have unpacked the question. Now, it’s time to start brainstorming!

How?

1. Get a blank piece of paper and write the question on top of the page. Remember to highlight the keywords!
2. Underneath the question, write the sentence which explains your understanding of the question. This sentence will help guide your thinking.
3. Write down all the ideas which come in your head. Write down everything ordinary and wacky.

Brainstorming is about writing everything down! The more ideas and words you write, the easier your planning process will be.

You don’t have to write full sentences down whilst brainstorming: write down trigger words and short phrases instead.

Here is an example of our brainstorm for Holes:

Step 3: Plan

Learning to plan your responses early, is a skill that will benefit you when you finally hit the HSC (it may seem a long way away, but those 6 years are going to fly by!)

Planning your extended response will save you time and help you write concisely without rambling on.

How?

• Write down an outline of what you will include in each paragraph. The outline shouldn’t be full sentences, it should be short bullet points:
  • Write down the theme of the paragraph
  • Write down the example.
  • Write the literary technique associated with the example.

Your plan should have an order of how you want your extended response to flow.

Ensure you do not jump from idea to idea, instead move methodically.

Hot tip: To get from a-z to we need to go through all the letters of the alphabet first. The same rule applies for writing. You cannot jump from idea to idea, you need to write fluently.

Step 4: PEEL Paragraph

Now it’s time to write that PEEL paragraph. Let’s slice the process up to make it easy to get perfect.

Step 4A- Topic Sentence 

The topic sentence introduces the idea you want to discuss in the paragraph. In the previous step, you already have the idea written down. The topic sentence will frame this into a sentence.

A good topic sentence tells the reader:

1. The main idea that will be discussed in the paragraph
2. The logic behind the argument

Write down the answer to the above two points for your paragraph separately. After you have done that, combine the two answers into one sentence (but if it gets too long, keep it as two sentences.

Ideally, your topic sentence should be concise, easy to understand and shorter than 25 words.

A good way you can structure the topic sentence is:

Through the (NAME OF TEXT), (AUTHOR’S NAME) highlights (IDEA) in an attempt to (LOGIC BEHIND THE IDEA).

Example: Holes

So, our topic sentence would be: Through ‘Holes’, Sachar highlights the lack of freedom in an attempt to bring light to the idea that choices influenced by those around you will ultimately make you powerless.

Step 4B: Introduce and present your example

Once you have written your topic sentence, it is time to introduce your example. Examples strengthen your argument and provide evidence to your idea.

In the planning stage, we have already chosen the example for each paragraph.

In this step, we are simply writing the example in a sophisticated manner as stating the quote is not enough.

When presenting an example, you need to clearly state:

1. Who is speaking
2. Any context relevant to the example
3. The technique used in the example

After you have answered these parts, you need to put the information into a sentence.

Example: Holes – Freedom

Step 4C: Explain your example

After presenting your example, you need to explain the logic behind it and why it strengthens your argument. The explanation allows the reader to understand your perspective of the text and the question.

The key questions you should answer when explaining your example are:

1. Why is this quote relevant?
2. What does it illustrate?
3. How does it create meaning?

You do not have to summarise your explanation in one sentence, it can be a bit longer!

This is the most important part of your PEEL paragraph! So, make sure you provide as much detail as possible without rambling on.

Example- Holes

Explanation of Freedom quotes:

Step 4D- Link your paragraph

In an extended response, you will have a number of paragraphs. Each paragraph will require a linking statement that summarises the argument for the paragraph as well as connect the paragraph to the question. It should tie everything you have said in the paragraph together to each other and the overall argument.

Remember the linking statement is different from a conclusion. A linking statement in an extended response ties the paragraph together whilst a conclusion summarises the entire response.

Do not introduce any new ideas in your linking statements!

Example: Holes

Linking sentence: Theme of Freedom

Step 4E: Put it all together

Put the previous 4 steps together into one paragraph.

Example: Holes; theme of Freedom

Follow the PEEL structure for each paragraph. This will help you put together a strong extended response that has a consistent structure and flow.

Step 5: Get feedback

You have written the response! It’s all done and dusted…nearly. It is now time to get some feedback!

One of the key steps in writing the perfect extended response is getting feedback.

Matrix students receive extensive feedback on their responses so they can improve and refine their writing for their senior years. Getting feedback from your tutor or teacher will help you pick up on mistakes you may have not noticed initially, strengthen your response and improve.

Step 6: Re-draft

Getting feedback is not enough! You need to use the feedback as constructive criticism so you can enhance your response and boost your marks.

How?

1. Read the feedback.
2. Understand what it is suggesting and why that may have been suggested.
3. If you do not understand a piece of feedback- go ask the marker for more help.
4. Read your response out loud.
5. Edit your writing by incorporating the feedback into the response.
6. Read your response backwards to pick up on misspellings and wrong words.
7. Show your edited response to a teacher or tutor for the second round of feedback.
8. Edit it again.

Hot Tip: the more you edit, the stronger your response will be!